Composed on scarlet leaves.
嵐ふくかみがき山のふもとにはもみぢやぬさとちりまがふらん
| arashi fuku kamigakiyama no fumoto ni wa momij ya nusa to chirimaguran | Storm winds blow Upon Mount Kamigaki’s Foothills: Their garland of scarlet leaves Seem to scatter all together. |
Sōen
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Yoshitada-shū 342
Kinkai wakashū 408
Kinkai wakashū 370
Kinkai wakashū 362
Kinkai wakashū 347
Kinkai wakashū 346
Naidaijin-ke uta’awase 01
Showers
Round One
Left (Win – Both judges)
終夜嵐の音にたぐひつつ木の葉とともに降るしぐれかな
| yomosugara arashi no oto ni taguitsutsu ko no ha to tomo ni furu shigure kana | All night long The sound of storm winds Is laced With that of leaves and Falling showers! |
Lady Settsu, in service to the Empress
1
Right
おぼつかないかにしぐるる空なればうらごの山のかたみなせなる
| obotsukana ika ni shigururu sora nareba urago no yama no kataminase naru | How puzzling it is! What sort of shower From the skies is it that Makes Urago Mountain Show such a thing? |
Lord Toshiyori
2
Toshiyori states: While the conception and diction of the first poem are not that unusual, it appears to have no errors to indicate. The second poem’s choice of diction—using ‘show such a thing’—is vague: I wonder if when composing about this mountain that’s what one does? Nevertheless, the assembled company have stated that ‘Urago Mountain’ feels unpoetic as a piece of diction, and thus I make the Left the winner.
Mototoshi states: I feel that ‘With that of leaves and / Falling showers!’ is a moving and charming conception, but find it impossible to understand why Urago Mountain should ‘show such a thing’ in the poem of the Right! I have to say that the Left is superior.
Sumiyoshi-sha uta’awase kaō ni-nen 49
Round Twenty-Four
Left (Win)
かぜのおとにわきぞかねましまつがねのまくらにもらぬしぐれなりせば
| kaze no oto ni waki zo kanemashi matsu ga ne no makura ni moranu shigure nariseba | The gusts of wind I cannot tell apart from The rustle of the pines roots For my pillow should no drips From the shower fall… |
Lord Sanefusa
97
Right
たびのいほはあらしにたぐふよこしぐれしばのかこひにとまらざりけり
| tabi no io wa arashi ni taguu yoko shigure shiba no kakoi ni tomarazarikeri | My traveller’s hut Is lashed by the storm wind’s Sideways showers— The brushwood walls Halt it not at all. |
Lord Yorimasa
98
The conception and configuration of the poem of the Left, starting ‘I cannot tell apart from / The rustle of the pines’ and continuing ‘For my pillow should no drips / From the shower fall’ is, once again, truly exceptional! As for the poem of the Right, while it appears to have a charming style and use of diction, even if it is the case that ‘sideways showers’ are a genuine phenomenon, it fails to sound particularly elegant, doesn’t it. In addition, the latter section of the poem, ‘the brushwood walls’, feels slightly lacking in conception. Thus, I make the Left the winner.
Sumiyoshi-sha uta’awase kaō ni-nen 32
Round Seven
Left (Tie)
きしちかみたびねのとこをうつなみのかへるひまにぞしぐれとはしる
| kishi chikami tabine no toko o utsu nami no kaeru hima ni zo shigure to wa shiru | Close by the coast My journey’s bed is Struck by waves; In the space as they withdraw, I know that showers are falling. |
Dharma Master Yūsei
63
Right
しばのとをたたくあらしのおとにまたしぐれうちそふたびのよはかな
| shiba no to o tataku arashi no oto ni mata shigure uchisou tabi no yowa kana | Upon my brushwood door The storm wind came a’knocking; The sound then Laced with showers, At midnight on my travels! |
Norimori
64
In the Left’s poem, it sounds as if the shower is continuing to fall quietly, yet it then appears to have the conception that one knows the showers are falling in the gaps between the waves breaking. In the Right’s poem, ‘The storm wind came a’knocking; / The sound then’ sounds charming, but I do wonder about how it looks to have lines beginning beginning with both ‘brushwood door’ [shiba no to] and ‘showers’ [shigure]. Thus, again, these tie.
