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Naidaijin-ke uta’awase 35

Round Eleven

Left (T – Win; M – Tie)

逢ふことをその年月と契らねば命や恋の限なるらむ

au koto o
sono toshitsuki to
chigiraneba
inochi ya koi no
kagiri naruramu
That we might meet
For months and years
She has not promised, so
My life will my love’s
Limit be, no doubt!

Lord Shigemoto
69

Right

よとともにもえこそわたれ我が恋は不二の高根のけぶりならねど

yo to tomo ni
moe koso watare
wa ga koi wa
fuji no takane no
keburi naranedo
With the coming of the night
Ever burning is
My love, though
From Fuji’s peak
Smoke it is not…

Lord Toshitaka
70

Toshiyori states: the first poem doesn’t seem bad. The second poem nothing but cliched. Thus, the first poem should win.

Mototoshi states: while love lasting lifelong without even a promise to meet over years and months is a painfully moving conception, someone burning every night is dear, too. Thus, it’s not inferior and these are of the same quality.

Tōin senzai awase 09

Left – Chrysanthemums

きくをうゑて花おもほゆるけふよりはながづきをこそまちわたりけれ

kiku o uete
hana omohoyuru
kyō yori wa
nagazuki o koso
machiwatarikere
I planted chrysanthemums, and
Wondering about the blooms
From today
For the Longest Month
Will I always be awaiting.

13a

きくをうゑて花おもほゆる今よりはながづきをこそまちわたりけれ

kiku o uete
hana omohoyuru
ima yori wa
nagazuki o koso
machiwatarikere
I planted chrysanthemums, and
Wondering about the blooms
From this moment
For the Longest Month
Will I always be awaiting.

13b

Right

よにふれどおいもしられぬものなればいまよりうゑつながづきのきく 

yo ni furedo
oi mo shirarenu
mono nareba
ima yori uetsu
nagazuki no kiku
My life goes by, yet
Old age I know not
So
From this moment have I planted
Chrysanthemums in the Longest Month.

14a

よにふれどおいもしられぬものなればいまよりうつすながづきのきく

yo ni furedo
oi mo shirarenu
mono nareba
ima yori utsusu
nagazuki no kiku
My life goes by, yet
Old age I know not
So
From this moment fading are
Chrysanthemums in the Longest Month

14b

Sumiyoshi-sha uta’awase kaō ni-nen 70

Round Twenty

Left (Tie)

みのうさをわすれぐさこそきしにおふれむべすみよしとあまもいひけれ

mi no usa o
wasuregusa koso
kishi ni oure
mube sumiyoshi to
ama mo iikere
The misery of my life
I forget among the day lilies
Growing on the shore—
No wonder, Sumiyoshi is a pleasant place
Say the fisherfolk, too!

Kunisuke
139

Right

よをわたるみちをたがへてまどふかないづれのかたにゆきかくれまし

yo o wataru
michi o tagaete
madou kana
izure no kata ni
yukikakuremashi
Passing through this world
My path I have mistaken and
Lost become!
Which way should
I go to hide myself away?

Horikawa
140

The Left has the poem ‘For folk forget among the day lilies / Growing there, or so they say.’[1] in mind and its conception, drawing upon ‘The misery of my life’ is pleasant, I have to say. The Right has a charming configuration for such a poem, but its similarity to the poem by Lord Toshiyori, ‘Deep in depression on Mount Wabuka / On my path through the world / Have I mis-stepped’[2] means that I feel it sounds hackneyed, yet the final section ‘Which way should I’ and what follows, does sound moving. I should say that these tie.


[1] Composed and sent to someone he knew who had gone to Sumiyoshi. 住吉とあまはつぐともながゐすな人忘草おふといふなり sumiyoshi to / ama wa tsugu tomo / nagai su na / hito wasuregusa / ou to iu nari ‘Sumiyoshi is a pleasant place to stay, / So say the fisher-folk, yet / Do not stay there long, in Nagai; / For folk forget among the day lilies / Growing there, or so they say.’ Mibu no Tadamine (KKS XVII: 917)

[2] [One of] a hundred poem sequence on feeling regret and shame over one’s fate. わぶか山よにふるみちをふみたがへまどひつたよふ身をいかにせん wabukayama / yo ni furu michi o / fumitagae / madoitsu tayou / mi o ika ni sen ‘Deep in depression on Mount Wabuka / On my path through the world / Have I mis-stepped, and / Wandering lost, / O, what am I to do?’Minamoto no Toshiyori (Sanboku kikashū 1427)

Daikōtaigōgū daijin kiyosuke-ason ke uta’awase 33

Round Thirty-Three

Left (Tie)

人数にあらずなるみのうらに又老の浪さへよるぞかなしき

hito kazu ni
arazu narumi no
ura ni mata
oi no nami sae
yoru zo kanashiki
Numbered among proper folk
I am not, as at Narumi
Bay, yet again do cruel
Waves of age
Break—so sad!

Lord Kinshige
65

Right

うきながらなほをしまるる命かな後の世とてもたのみなければ

ukinagara
nao oshimaruru
inochi kana
nochi no yo tote mo
tanominakereba
In constant suffering
Still do I regret
This life!
For even in the world to come
Can I place no trust…

Moromitsu
66

Neither has any parts I can’t understand.

Daikōtaigōgū daijin kiyosuke-ason ke uta’awase 26

Round Twenty-Six

Left

恋ひしなんいのちを誰にゆづりおきてつれなき人のはてをみせまし

koishinan
inochi o tare ni
yuzuri’okite
tsurenaki hito no
hate o misemashi
Likely dying of love,
My life, to whom should I
Consign?
That cruel girl’s
Ending—would that show it to her?

Shun’e

51

Right (Win)

つれもなき人はおもひもすてられでうき身のみこそなげまほしけれ

tsure mo naki
hito wa omoi mo
suterarede
ukimi no mi koso
nagemahoshikere
So cruel is
That girl, but my passion for her
I cannot abandon;
It is my pitiful self that
I would wish to throw away!

Kenshō

52

The Left isn’t bad, but it’s a bit cliched. As for the Right, having both ‘abandon’ and ‘throw away’ could be a fault and yet the conception of one ‘abandoning passion’ is different. Whichever way you look at it, it wins.

Daikōtaigōgū daijin kiyosuke-ason ke uta’awase 08

Round Eight

Left (Tie)

うき世をば又なににかはなぐさめん花にさきだついのちともがな

ukiyo oba
mata nani ni ka wa
nagusamen
hana ni sakidatsu
inochi to mogana
In this cruel world
Is there yet anything else
To console me?
Before the blossoms’ departure
I would my life do the same…

Court Lady Taifu
15

Right

桜さく春の山風みねこせば雪ふりつもる谷のほそみち

sakura saku
haru no yamakaze
mine koseba
yuki furitsumoru
tani no hosomichi
When in cherry-blooming
Spring, the mountain breezes
Cross the peaks
Snow falls and piles high
Upon the narrow valley paths.

Moromitsu
16

Both poems are smooth, and on that basis, I would say that the Right is superior, but it has an archaic element, while the Left lacks anything unusual about it, so this is a tie of quality.

SZS XVI: 1026

I had asked that Master of Discipline Kōkaku be accorded the honour of the role of reader at the ceremony for the recitation of the Vimalakīrti nirdeśa Sutra, and when he was constantly passed over, had complained to the Hosshōji Lay Priest and former Palace Minister; even though he mentioned ‘Shimeji plain’, the following year Kōkaku was once more passed over, so I composed this and sent it to him.

契りおきしさせもが露をいのちにてあはれことしの秋もいぬめり

tigiri okisi
sasemo ga tuyu wo
inoti nite
aFare kotosi no
aki mo inumeri
A promise dropped, as
Dewfall on the mugwort—
Such is life, so
Miserable, this year’s
Autumn must arrive.

Fujiwara no Mototoshi

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